Advances in Medicine and Public Health

Using your guided notes from the text, explain why governments should spend more money on public health.

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  1. gizemgokceron 03 Jan 2011 at 10:02 pm

    Governments should spend more money on public health because lots of diseases could occur as a result of poor public health. Poor hygiene and sanitation could easily cause typhoid. Goiter and rickets were diseases resulting from poor nutrition. Unsafe work places and hazardous working conditions cause injuries and general ill health. Additionally, unsafely roads could directly cause lots of traffic accidents. Air quality, the purity of drinking water, food safety, road safety and the inspection of work dangers all need to be checked regularly by governments for creating a better and more healthy society. In healthy societies people don?t die from water supply, no air pollutions and workers are safe in their jobs. Therefore life expectancy continues to rise for all people. As a conclusion, the more governments care and spend money on public health, the number of people living long healthy lives increase.

    Good work Gizem. You mentioned a lot of good points. However, I would have liked to see something about the current obesity epidemic. Also the ending seems a bit strange to me. I do not see the relevance of the sentences “In healthy societies people don’t die from … rise for all people.” All the sentences should be answering the question “Why should governments spend more money on public health.” I like the last sentence, except for the beginning of it. You do not have to start with such an obvious opening for the ending in a paragraph. This is more for essays. However, if you do use such an opening the correct form is “in conclusion“.

  2. oguzhanuon 04 Jan 2011 at 6:05 pm

    Governments should spend more money on public health because as poor and disadvantaged people cannot spend money on their health, many diseases based from the poverty will be prevented such as typhoid, goiter and rickets. It is obvious that these 3 illnesses are based on poor nutrition and lack of hygiene. In addition the conditions of settlement area are an important factor. in order to have a healthy settlement it has to be clean. For instance in developing countries the air is more polluted and the working conditions are more difficult so that in the future cumulative disease can occur. When public health works effectively nothing will happen, people won’t die from water and food supply, workers will be safe in their jobs the air will be breathable epidemics wont pack the hospitals and life expectancy will rise for all. To conclude, governments have to give importance to the public health because it will have good outcomes for all.

    Good work O─čuzhan. You touched on some important points. However I would have liked to see something about public health issues in developed countries, that is traffic accidents and the obesity epidemic. However you have a good ending! You need to be a little careful with language. Please check my corrections above carefully and ask me if you have any questions. Also do not use sentences taken directly from the book. You need to paraphrase.

  3. cemtoreton 04 Jan 2011 at 10:06 pm

    Governments should spend more money on public health because at the begining of the twentieth century, major threats resulted from diseases which were caused by poor public health. By giving attention to Public health cause better health for the global population, influencing the lives and well-being of billions of men, woman and children around the world. So to increase life expectancy government should spend more money on public health.

    Cem quite good work. You explained what has happened in the past that shows that paying attention to public health can make the whole community have a better standard of living. However you would have made your argument stronger by including some examples. Also you have not mentioned why governments should still spend money on public health now. You need to talk about traffic accidents and the obesity epidemic.

  4. selenyon 04 Jan 2011 at 11:43 pm

    The Government should spend more money for public health because the major threats resulted from diseases which were caused by poor public health.Typhiod could be killer in unhygienic circumstances.Goiter and rickets are diseases resulting from poor nutrition.Many kinds of diseases are associated with unsafe working places and hazardous working conditions.Besides,in many parts of the world,air quality,the purity of drinking water,food safety,road safety and the inspection of work dangers are all linked with public health.For the conclusion, if a government spends more money for the public to enhance their life circumstances there could be a decrease in the number of people dying at and early age.

    Selen I liked the information that you used but I think you should have made it clearer which information was about the past and which information is about the current situation. I don’t think you need to use a marker to signal the concluding sentence of the paragraph – this is more suitable for an essay. But if you do want to use one, use “in conclusion” or “to sum up” or “in short”.

  5. berivanbrknon 05 Jan 2011 at 12:06 am

    Major diseases threatened communities because of poor public health at the beginning of the 20th century.Typhoid was a killer,because of poor hygiene and sanitation. As a result of poor nutrition,goiter and rickets occurred. Nowadays The world?s resources like drinking water,food safety,road safety are all under threat. All of these are associated with poverty.Also, even in countries where there is not so much poverty, disease,injury and health problems could occur because of unsafe work places and hazardous working conditions.In conclusion, the government has spend more money for public health.

    Berivan I really liked the way you organised your ideas. Moving from the past to the present was a logical approach. However you need to signal that you are talking about the present clearly. Also you could have have included some information about the obesity epidemic to make the evidence for the fact that there are public health dangers in developed countries at present stronger. Please try to take a little more care to make you language more accurate. I think the last sentence would have had a better connection to previous sentences if you had used “therefore” instead of “in conclusion”.

  6. mertkahvecion 05 Jan 2011 at 2:09 am

    Public health systems have contributed to better health but in many parts of the world , food safety, road safety and air quality are all under threat. This is linked to poverty. There are too many deaths because of poor hygiene and sanitation. This situation causes a disease which is dangerous like typhoid. To prevent things getting worse, the government should spend more money on public health.

    Mert I liked the way you started and the main ideas that you used: past and present. However, the organisation got a little mixed up. I would have liked to see some details on how public health systems contributed to better public health in the past e.g typhoid, goiter and rickets and deaths of mothers and babies in child birth. You could have also added the modern public health threats to developed countries: obesity, road traffic accidents and smoking. However, I really liked your ending.

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